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Welcome to Madison Woods‘ Friday Fictioneers based on her photo prompt. This week’s prompt was a difficult one, and I had a hard time coming up with a story of 100 words. Eventually, the poet and or romantic in me took over and here I am with a poem. Do enjoy this piece for your weekend, my friends.
Lost Without You
You touch my deepest soul
With your heart’s flow
Reaching out to heal my scars
That weep without your balm
Your body holds me captive
Your kisses so addictive
My babe; my heart-throb
Without you I’m lost
You sing, and ah, your voice
Cool dawn breeze, so gentle.
Caress me, and I am soft
Your smell intoxicates my senses
Yearning for your warmth
You have me reeling, dizzy
Your love engulfs my being
I am lost without you
Now, all I have of you
Is your old wallpaper
Above the room’s gloom
Silently peeling away
My memories of you
(c) Celestine Nudanu
4/5/12
Sweet and sad.
Thanks. Glad you commented.
Very sad, but it touched a chord in me. Well done. And thanks for the comments on mine.
Glad you connected with it. And thanks for stopping by too.
So poignant, yet also happy to know the memories are kept alive!
My link is http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/old-wallpaper
Thanks for the comments. Sometimes, memories are all that we have to keep us going. Off to yours.
Excellent last stanza. (Perhaps an ‘s’ at the end of ‘intoxicate’.) Housekeeping. Habit of mine. could be wrong and probably am.
Aloha,
Doug
http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-nerve/
Correction noted, Doug. I am glad you stopped by and thanks for the comments. Will see yours soon.
Very sad.
Here’s mine
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/old-wallpaper-for-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction
Thanks, will be there.
I liked “all I have left of you is the old wallpaper”. Well told, concise and full of feeling.
Mine is here http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/old-wallpaper-friday-fictioneers/
Thanks so much for your comments. Will be there.
Very sad, but at least there are good memories. That’s always a plus.
http://authorbrandonscott.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/this-old-house/
I agree, thanks for the visist and comments.
I love that line ‘all I have left of you is the old wallpaper’ beautifully written and evocative.
Here’s mine too: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-a-wall-to-keep-a-secret/
Thank you for your kind words. Will be there.
A very sad tale of loss.
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/175/
Indeed, Gary. Thanks.
peeling away memories is a sad thing.
http://brainsnorts.wordpress.com/2012/05/02/54-friday-fictioneers-by-madison-woods/
Yeah, I agree.
LOVE it…beautiful tale of love and loss. Well done mon amie, well done :)
Boomie dear, thanks for your words. They mean a lot to me.
Gorgeous poem. The sad ones usually are.
http://whimsicalquestsofacuriousmind.blogspot.com/2012/05/may-4th-friday-fictioneers-youre-insane.html
Glad you liked it.
Sad and haunting, well done.
Mine’s at: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/dysfunctional-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/
Thanks for the compliment, Sandra.
The sad and the sweet so evident. Nicely done.
Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/
Thanks; I like the contrast you drew.
It was sad, but still a brilliant piece of poetry. Nice job!
My link: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/rebuild/
I am happy you find this brilliant. Thanks.
Lovely, full of feeling.
Ow, thanks.
Very nicely written and evocative poetry. The sense of lingering memories and feelings comes across strongly. Well done :-)
I am happy you like this. Your compliment is appreciated.
some good lines: “peeling away memories”…a good tie in with the old wallpaper…liked that you took a poem approach….thanks for stopping by and reading mine as well.
I am happy you made the connection too. I saw it after I had written out the poem. Thank you.
Beautiful! I love the way you told the story in poetic form–that’s not done too often in our Friday Fictioneers. Well done! One of my favorites so far.!
Thanks for commenting on mine.
Ow, I am flattered. Thanks for the beautiful endorsement.
Wonderful heartfelt poem instilling so much emotion, love and loss.
Here’s mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-the-gig/
Thanks so much for your kindess.
This brought tears to my eyes!
I can understand; it is touching, if I say so myslef. Thank you.
Wow, I love how this makes me so sad that the love is gone. Thank you for commenting on mine over here: http://remakingme-atiyatownes.blogspot.com/2012/05/fixer-upper-friday-flash-fiction.html
I am so happy you like it.
The silence of peeling away memories is evocative and strong … nice job
Yes, especially when the memories would not go away. Thanks for the stop over and the compliment.
Wonderful! I love the memories of the past!
~Susan (http://www.susanwenzel.com/)
Thanks, Susan.
Beautiful, heartfelt poem.,.full of pain and longing. Had no idea where you were going and then…POW… you got me with the wallpaper. Nice twist. Go back in and change wall paper to one word…wallpaper. Thanks for visiting me. And yes, she found the jars of pennies.
Thanks so much for your encouraging words. Glad you liked the twist. Much thanks again for the correction. It’s done.
I’m glad you stopped by so I could find your poem. It read like a song and I could almost hear the music.
http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-beholder/
Ow, such a beautiful endorsement. Thanks for visiting.
Very pretty, I especially enjoyed “…scars that weep without your balm”
Thank you, Wakefield.
Definitely a very touching and bittersweet effort here. Nicely done.
Thank you, Jeffrey.
Glad the poet took over…gorgeous, so much feeling.
-Jennifer
Thanks, Jennifer. Glad you stopped by.
Lovely poem!
Thanks, Julia.
What struck me here was the sadness and the passion. Also the image of someone holding a piece of wallpaper while feeling these emotions is very moving.
Thanks so much for appreciating the poem. Glad that you stopped by.
aww that last stanza is so sad.
Yes, I agree. Thanks for stopping by.
What a beautiful poem. I loved the title and the way the end echoes the sad sentiment.
I am tickled by your comments; glad you loved it. Thanks for the stop over.
Excellent. You must have a knack for the sad, wistful poem. :-)
LOL! I don’t know why.