Today, I am joining the Ligo Haibun Challenge hosted by Managua of Cabin Fever. This is an excellent writing challenge that offers writers an opportunity to improve and hone their written skills. I encourage you to give this one a try for after following the writing trail for a while now, I have come to believe that it is worth the try. For me also, this challenge offers me the opportunity to develop further love of fiction and haiku combined 🙂
The judges of this challenge, Penny included, look at originality, style, emotional resonance, lexical balance, relationship between haiku and prose and select an entry to award the prestigious Circle of Appreciation every week.
The haībun format is as follows:
- A paragraph (more than one paragraph is fine, or just a few sentences) in prose form and
- the haiku/collection of haiku related to the text to close. The haiku should be as authentic as possible, with therefore no syllable count, no capitals or full stop, all ideally making 220 word max, all-inclusive
- each week there is a choice of two prompt words or phrases, or two visuals. Please choose one for our theme
- wear the Ligo badge with pride on your blog! And pin the Circle of Appreciation to your blog too if it is in the haibun Honourably Mentioned in Despatches each week!
- prizes are given on sporadic occasions – earrings, scarves etc..
- submit a haibun for Haibun Today online magazine by going here
So, here we go: I hope you find this enjoyable 🙂
Apples have an exquisite enticing quality. The roundness give the impression of succulent juiciness and the redness means only one thing; allure. Together they give the illusion of irresistible sex. Now, would Adam have had sex with Eve if the snake had not charmed and deceived her with the apple? What if the snake had sex with Eve? Blasphemous thoughts, I know, but sometimes I simply wonder.
Looking back now, I realised the signs had been there all along but I was blind. You see, my sister loved the creepy slithering things to a fault. And I found that odd.
The day we found a snake moving silently down the tree in our backyard garden, the glitter in her eyes had unnerved me so. ‘Do you have a destiny with these things?’ I had asked her in a rather shaky voice. She made no answer then but she had prevented the garden boy from killing it and we had watched as it crawled away, disappearing into the hedges. That night, my dreams were of scorpions, snakes and crabs and I had woken up shivering.
From then on I started to fear her, irrational, maybe. But too late, I noticed the attraction between my sister and my fiance.
saccharine smile so bright
she slithers ever suggestively
a stab in my heart
This is beautiful Celestine. I like the correlation between the haiku and the fictitious story. Good job dear friend!
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Oh Seyi, your words have made me happy. Thank you 🙂 I was a bit apprehensive this being my first attempt.
It’s pristine Celestine, you need not fear!
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Gracias 🙂
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This is fantastic Celestine =) The haiku is fantastic I just keep reading it lol
Thank you so, Candice. 🙂
Hello my talented friend. Welcome aboard. I can’t tell you how happy I am to see you writing a haibun. You already know my feelings on the creative level of your haiku. This then a natural progression for you. Your piece is excellent. The story, the flow and richness of your words, and of course the essence of the piece itself within your closing haiku! So very well done Celestine! 🙂
Penny, your endorsement mean so much to me. Thank you, 🙂
For your written words, the pleasure was mine Celestine! 🙂
Oh my!
Gooood one though. Evil good.
Thanks a mil, Rosy
Little sister snake
hissing off the engagement
stinging tongue and tail
Respect to you Celestine!
I’m most grateful, Gilly. And that is a powerful and apt one you wrote there!
Creature that bites you
Springs from your own cloth, beware
the smile that bares all
Audible gasp at the end. Oh my. I am so glad you joined this challenge. I look forward to reading more.
I can hear your gasp, Nana. 🙂 Thanks so much. I just pray I’m able to continue writing 🙂
Your prose has smoothly progressed to a haiku. This was a lovely one
Thank you, Nightllake
You are a beautiful writer – the way you uncoiled that tale with this sting in the tail so to speak was masterful. You plyed with the reader, toyed with the reader – the mention of the phallic snake with Eve was pure literature; dangerous, intriguing, brave. Very good haiku indeed, to say the least.
Your lovely compliment has made my day, Managua. Thank you 🙂
I like the progression of the story from the informative, metaphorical nature of the apples to betrayal. Well done!
Thank you, Steph.
I throughly enjoyed your writing!
I’m happy 🙂
amazing piece Celestine!
Thanks, Trisha
i love how you started by describing apples and what they represent.. the ending really stung. juicy piece of writing 🙂
Many thanks, Kz. 🙂
excellent haibun as all your readers already stated…i agree with them. your story flows with intrigue and went so well with the photo prompt. great work! ♥
Thank you so much, Sunshine 🙂
you’re welcome. ♥
Whew! This is awesome!!! I loved every word. So good. I sure hope it’s not true. But better your fiancé than your husband, I supposed. Your sister, though. Oh my. That would be the worst kind of pain. I love the connection you made between the snakes and the man.
Thank you so much, Henna. This is pure fiction.
Very nice my friend. Very nice. I quite enjoyed reading this.
Thank you, Amber. I read your wonderful haiku in the newly released Collection. Congratulations once again. my friend 🙂
And to you. I love the whole anthology. I pulled up to yours first! I’m so happy we share this together! 🙂
Me too, Amber. I now wish to send my many haiku to a publisher or magazine for consideration. Any help, please? 🙂
wow, this is one of the first haibuns i’ve read…i loved it! =)
Thank you so much 🙂
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I like the way you used the haiku to sum up the relationship. I remember once, when my own sister thought she was a gift to ”boys” and was not happy when I started dating. Perhaps she had wanted first dibs on every boy?
Ha ha ha, Jules. I’m having a good laugh. I know of friends whose sisters behaved just like that. It’s all a part o;f growing up. Thanks for coming by. I appreciate it 🙂
Oh, good. Laughing keeps us young – so ‘they’ say 🙂