The prompts at Ligo Haibun this week are two words, Paradise and Apathy. I missed out on last week’s prompts. I had a busy week and kept pushing it off till another Friday today. Oh well, here I am, right on time with my choice below:
Coldness seeps into my core. Melting glacier. It flows through my veins numbing me. When love grows cold, it is like dying fire, flickering off and on its throes. The embers are useless; only in the death of it can it be useful. In an urn.
Once upon a time, we were hot together. erupting volcano. Our love embraced all we stood for, our values, our dreams, an avalanche of tidal winds sweeping us along waves of sublime ecstasy.
Now, I welcome the iceberg as my dreams evaporate; the emasculated skeletal frame of a relationship decorating my heart. And all because you exhausted your masculinity elsewhere.I feel cold warm me with breath of dying love
Penny L Howe said:
That makes two of us in a serious catch up mode Celestine! I understand perfectly. This is wonderful. Imagery, flow, expressions, word power – each of these you are using so effectively. You create a haibun that is a work of art here! And your haiku, well you know what I’m going to say … 🙂
I can only bow in humble appreciation, Penny 🙂
Lucid Gypsy said:
I like it very much 🙂
Thank you Gilly. 🙂
Christina ~ said:
Celestine…This is so powerfully evocative and gorgeously succinct!! Reading your words is all ways both a treat and an honor!
The honour is mine, Christina, for having you grace this blog all the time 🙂
I have seen what unfaithfulness can do – thankfully not within my own relationship but of others close enough so I can feel their chilled hearts. Rarely can that miscue of judgement be repaired. Though it is possible through very hard work.
I too missed last week. But I think I’m going to write something for it anyway…
Thank you for your kind words on my entry this week.
You are very welcome, Jules. Sometimes, I cannot help it when snippets of my life seep through my writing. Thank God the pain is now erased 🙂
Skye @ TheSanctuaryofMyHeart said:
Sweet Friend, I loved this. Thank you.
The pleasure is mine, Skye!
Nana Prah said:
Very powerful and deep. I’m impressed (but I shouldn’t be because I’ve come to expect it from you)
Thank you so much for the nice compliment, Nana
silent kim said:
Breathtaking. I have to try this exercise. As I stated earlier your writing is really blossoming. I love it.
Thank you Kim. Do join us, now that you are back full swing!
The Other Side of Ugly - Letters to Humanity said:
Wonderfully written Celestine! Truly.
Thank you Sheri
Dawn @ AlterEgomexicana said:
This brings back memories of love lost and the process therein…so beautifully and urgently written!
Most grateful for the comment, Dawn.
bittersweet yet deeply beautiful.
Thank you 🙂
Wow! That was really good! The last paragraph gave me the chills and sounded rather sad.
Thank you, Risa 🙂
Alice Keys said:
Sad and romantic. You pulled this one from deep.
I did, Alice. From long ago 🙂
Alice Keys said:
Wow. No wonder this is so real. Thanks for writing it. 🙂
Björn Rudberg (brudberg) said:
Wow .. a really powerful prose… I really like the last part … it tells you all about apathy and pain.
Thank you Bjorn. Good to see you here!
This says it all. The end – it’s all gone.
Yes indeed, Freya. Vaporized! when we do not cherish something, we lose it. 🙂
Sharmishtha Basu said:
that’s a tragic end to a beautiful relationship for sure
Yes, Trisha, a tragic and painful end.
Eric Alagan said:
“…exhausted his masculinity elsewhere…”
Must be some woman – and yet, he missed a real woman at home. Sad and tragic even to a beautiful love story.
Thanks Eric. Appreciates your comment.
Eric Alagan said:
Typo – exhausted 😦
the topic of apathy very well connected to a relationship. nice job
Thank you, Nightlake
Excellent piece, beautifully written, very moving.
Thank you for the nice words 🙂
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“the emasculated skeletal frame of a relationship decorating my heart”…..oh wow….LOVE IT
Glad you do Anja 🙂
Seyi sandra said:
You pick your words like diamond, I love it! This is a classic!!
Most grateful, my dear 🙂
oh. you leave me speechless…wordless. 🙂 so well done!!
Thank you Sunshine 🙂
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Sarah Ann said:
‘And all because you exhausted your masculinity elsewhere.’ – ouch. Your writing so powerfully evokes the pain and sadness of a lost love. Love your use of temperature as comparison.
Thank you Sarah, for the kind words.
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I love the mournful remembrance. Watching a love vanish before your eyes. This is excellent Celestine
Thank you so much, Alastair.
Managua Gunn said:
You have that author’ ability to get into your character – which in turn means you are in us readers, right there, put that churning feeling in our lower bellies – and only with words alone. This haibun spoke strongly of betrayal, but exposed it’s pain first,before finally telling us the whole tale – that is masterful, and I suspect a natural narrator skill that you have. Wonderful haibun.
I always wait for your comments like a woman waits for her lover’s kiss! And I know you will not fail. Thank you Managua. Only a a person who has known much pain and sorrow in love can express it so. 🙂
Ye Pirate said:
A touching reply, you use words like a magician with wand!