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So soon, Friday is here and with it the fun starts. The ‘avalanche of 100 word stories descend on all the Fictioneers as we juggle, manoeuvre our way and make the ‘mad dash’ through blogs to read marvelous stories and poems and comment. This week, Madison Woods‘ photo prompt below had me cracking my head but thank goodness, I was able to come up with something. Its worth remains to be judged by you good Fictioneers. A big shout out to Madison for her wonderful idea. So, here we go:
Preying Mantis
Stunning, sexy
Arresting, bold,
Audacious, tantalising,
She plays them all
The men in need
On heat for her fire
A moth in flight
She hops
To them she bares
Her wings
Raw, she blinds them
With her decadence
Feeding on their lust
They, ever so gullible
Like a wanton fly
To the mango
Like a flying ant
To shimmering light
Preying on their folly
Ignorant in their bliss
Lips to Lips
Flesh to flesh
Soul to soul
Sending them reeling
Bodies on collision
Ever so erotic,
They, confused
In their desire
Remain lost
In their pleasure
She, a Preying Mantis
(c) Celestine Nudanu
23/05/12
Reading Pleasure 
Required reading for Mantis’ prey everywhere. Still won’t help them, though, will it? Nice poem from a tough prompt.
Aloha,
Doug
No, it wouldn’t. Thanks, Doug.
I knew you would kill it….Brilliant!!! Brilliant!!!
Ha ha ha! LOL. Thank you very much; but I struggled with this, Boomie. Glad you like it.
Love the line “She blinds them with her decadence”. Very nice.
http://kaitlinandmichaelbranch.com/2012/05/25/angel-in-a-polyester-uniform/
Thank you, Kaitlin.
Girl is dangerous! Boys don’t even see it coming. Wonderful poem. Poetry snaps for you on this.
My attempt: http://unduecreativity.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/chasing-the-divine/
Thanks. Your is just wonderful.
I found this a tough prompt but this is such an imaginative and clever approach. Your poetry is beautiful.
Thank you very much. Glad you stopped by.
I am no judge of poetry, but I do like this 🙂
Thanks for your lovely comments on ours.
http://www.lazuli-portals.com/flash-fiction/a-moment-s-pause
Glad you like it and you’re welcome.
What a wonderfully poetic and tantalizing offering. Think you worried for nothing. Brilliantly played out.
My offering: http://www.jeffreyhollar.com/2012/05/of-moths-and-mcnuggets.html
Thank you so much, Jeffrey, for your lovely compliments.
This is a brilliant approach.
I love the unexpected ending: She, a Preying Mantis.
And we all know what the female preying mantis does to the male after mating, don’t we.
Check out mine AT http://logo-ligi.com/2012/05/25/mothballs/
Thank you, Kwadwo. I’m glad you’re on baord. I’m off to yours.
Each a morsel of pleasure, savored…swallowed.
Nicely done.
Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/
Thank you very much
Stunning, Sexy… Love the beginning to this poem. You have a way with poems…lovely!
Thanks, Geosi. Glad you stopped by.
Oops sorry, wrong link: http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/checkin-out-the-joint-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/
Thank you, Sandra.
Love it – great use of language to paint your story.
Mine is here: http://erinleary.wordpress.com/2012/05/24/flight-path/
Thank you.
How vicious. They love being caught up in her magnificence, even if it means their death.
Here’s mine:
http://jonathanmwright.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneers-flee/
Yes, don’t they? Thank you for coming over.
A very erotic and evocative poem. I love the imagery and the possibility we are speaking of both insects or women luring men 🙂
Thank you for the lovely words.
You’re a gifted poet. Beautiful, literary interp of the photo. Thanks for reading and commenting on my story.
Thanks so much for your lifting words
Nice, nice, nice! Great take on the prompt. Thanks for the comment on mine.
Thank you. You’re most welcome!
Such an erotic and perilous dance to be sure. The mantis is such a facinating creature in so many ways. Thanks for visiting! http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/friday-flash-fiction-not-moving-on/
Yeah, you’re right. Thanks for the comments and the stop over too.
Wonderful poem! And I love the photo of the Luna moth. They are so beautiful.
Thanks, Heather. They are , aren’t they, and the subject of so much creativity this Friday.
Confused in desire, lost in pleasure – beautifully descriptive language. Very sensual & erotic. I loved it.
thanks for reading & commenting on mine.
Thank you very much, Russel.
Such lustful creatures our luna moths! Very artfully done!
Thanks, Sheila.
Some powerful images, here: playing males “on heat for her fire”; “blinds them with … decadence”; “like a wanton fly to the mango”; “feeding on their lust”. I am not particularly fond of poetry, but this one works for me. Mine is much less poetic (but possibly quite as deceptive), and can be found at http://scottcheck.blogspot.com/2012/05/font-face-font-family-cambria-p.html
Your comment is much appreciated.
What wonderful sentiments and imagery, I particularly liked the sentance “Preying on their folly Ignorant in their bliss” doesn’t that just sum up the human experience for so many.
Here’s mine for anyone else that cares to comment: http://womanontheedgeofreality.com/2012/05/25/fairys-through-the-window/
Thanks a mil, Linda, for your kind words. Indeed, many of us have fallen prey to such human experiences at one time or the other and more.
Oh yes, it just goes with part of life in my experience 🙂
Wonderful imagery and flow. You nailed the prompt this week.
Did I now? Thank you very much, Janet. I appreciate your kindness.
Nicely done. A story told through prose. Reminded me of a succubus.
Thanks for the comment on mine: http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/25/friday-fictioneer-perspective/
Thank you too.
Aha! So you are trying out your erotic wings! A good start – and woe to all who fall pry to the Mantis.
Yours as ever,
Lindaura
and for those who have yet to see mine, not erotic in the least this week, here I am: http://fictionvictimtoo.blogspot.com
Ha ha ha, I like that. Thanks for stopping by.
What great use of language! I could taste the words as we tumbled into violent ecstasy. Hmmm, excuse me, I think I’ll go find a fan, now.
Kathy
http://notforallmarkets.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/beauty-in-truth/
Oh my! That serious? (LOL!) I’m happy the poem has this effect on you. Thank you so much.
I’m a sucker for well used language! It’s all Shakespeare’s fault. 🙂
lovely poetry 🙂
Thanks a mil!
I’m glad to see someone remembers that most preying mantis are female (they eat the male’s head after mating)… A different perception of the mantis’ style of deception, though it reminds me more of a Venus fly trap myself, but that’s the cool thing about literature and art– they are both how we perceive the world!
Here’s mine for anyone else: http://saberdragon.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/flash-friday-fictioneer-a-letter-to-illa/
Yes, I agree. I took some literary liberties with the prompt. Thanks.
What a beautiful poem about an exotic creature!
–Jan
Thank you so much, Jan.
Teriffic poem from that prompt! Still working up the nerves to join in the fun.
Thanks, Nifti. Work it up fast. you won’t regret it.
😀
Two lovely poems so far today. The poets are rocking it! I wish I could match it: http://melodypearson.com/flash-fiction/may-25-2012-moths/
Thanks. I’m glad we rocked it. Yours was good too, Melody.
Never thought of moths as erotic — until now. Your poem works! Nice.
Ha ha ha! Thanks.
really really COOL!
Yeah! thanks a mil.
As a gardener, I’ll never see a praying mantis the same way. lol. Great work.
OMG! I’m sure they do have thier uses. glad for your comment.
Great poem! So . . . do bad things happen to flies that go to mangos? I did not know that. Thanks for your comments at my post!
http://stonesoupnovelist.com/2012/05/24/a-scene-from-the-novel-the-alchemists-tower/
Thank you for commenting. No, flies eat up the core of the mangoes. LOL!
Hi, i left the best for the last…i knew my journey here would pay off…reminds me of a fav quote: ‘as flies are unto wanton boy, so are we in the hands of the gods…they kill us for their sports’. I hope the Girls is having her fill? Great work sister!
Naijaman, long time no see. I miss you. Your comments make my day; thanks a mil! is the quote from Gods Are Not To Blame or Oedipus? I’m lost, shamefully.
It’s a Shakespearean quote sha, i hardly can recall the book…was used in an intro. class ENG 113.
BTW, i enjoy the thrill of reading this week and am happy i could overcome the pressure to offer anything this week.
Again, how’s Ghana this week?
Shakespeare? Then it’s definetly Julius Caeser becasue I remember we use to make fun with this line way back in school. Anyway, I hope you will be able to join us this week. Ghana is cool, except for so much political insults back and forth on the airwaves. What else is new?
Really, 29th/05 is our Federal Democracy day…and we hope to get a dozen of dried speeches and riposte from our political quarter…am about flex my muscles, in honour of my president, in prep for the #ff party!
Yeah, can’t wait to read!
a fantastic poem! awesome…your reader can find my FF here: http://writeforacause.org/2012/05/24/friday-fictioneers-moths-conversation/
Glad you find this fantastic. Thank you.
Real great descriptions, marvellous flow, a wonderful read.
Much appreciated!
I’m not much for poetry, but this was great. Thank you. http://www.unfoldingmyth.com/fridayfictioneers/
Thanks for your sincere words.
Great use of words and imagery. I’ll never see the preying mantis quite the same way after this. 😉
LOL! Thanks; sure that the preying mantis has her good use.
Lovely piece of poetry and a very interesting take on the prompt.
For your readers here’s mine if they wish to drop by:
http://tollykitsjourney.wordpress.com/2012/05/25/moths-fridayfictioneers-flashfiction
:Thank you very much.
Your writing is elegant & you have a great sense of rhythm. Nice end line!
Here’s my link for this week, hope you check it out: http://moniqueshante.wordpress.com/2012/05/26/friday-fictioneers-the-light-5-25-12/
I appreciate your comments and glad you stopped by. I enjoyed the exchange by your moths. Great work.
Amazing how your imagination crafted this wonderful poem. The short, staccato lines evoke the quick give and take of the encounter. You are adept in prose and poetry. Very well done.
Thank you so much for your wonderful words; I’m so glad you found this poem worthy.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. What a wicked thing she is! Wouldn’t we all secretly love to prey on our target? I have a resident preying mantis at my home and she does give me the most disdainful look. If any creature gets too close to her she only has to reach out one leg and they quickly scurry away. Great take on the photo prompt.
Sometimes, I wish I had that much power to wield on my man! LOL! Thanks for enjoying this.
Your poem nearly pulsed with energy, Celestine! Loved it 🙂
I’m glad you loved this, Madison. Thanks for stopping by, desptie your busy schedule.
Well put together. Really enjoyed “she blinds them/
With her decadence” 🙂
Thank you , Stacy.
May God help them… all that prey. 😆
Ha ha ha! Indeed!
I enjoyed every morsel of your prose, just as the mantis did with her prey! (I’m sorry I’m so late getting to your story…but I’m glad I did!)
~Susan
Thank you Susan. Glad you enjoyed it. Better late than never!