Hi folks, I’m back on Friday Fictioneers after being missing in action for a while now. I must admit that I missed you guys during the break. Though I’m still busy I couldn’t resist the prompt by Sandra Crook. Thanks to Madison Woods, here is another opportunity for us to bring out our best in the fun-filled 100 words short story. (I exceeded the limit by a good 13 words). Kindly read on and offer your crits and comments. 🙂
My Dream
I had to pass through the woods to get to my destination. I didn’t know where I was going but it was imperative that I got there.
The branches of the trees hung so low that they scratched my face and arms as I passed by and I winced. At that instant, I missed the boulders that lay scattered across my path and too late, I tripped, hurtling face down. I could feel my face split open as the warm blood gushed out. For a while I felt nothing, only a numbness of the face.
But the searing heat and pain when I woke up told me I hadn’t been dreaming after all.
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Ouch!!! Someone might need the medics…very original take. Good job! Good to have you back 🙂
Thank you, Boomie. I missed you guys too.
Welcome back and ouch! You could make some easy cuts if you want to get down to 100 words. Try “The low-hanging branches scratched my face and arms as I passed by, wincing” would cut out nine just there. If you say “missed the boulders that lay scatter across my path and tripped”, that’s another three. Make it “face-down” instead of “face down” and there are your thirteen words and you still the enjoyable (but not to the narrator) story but it’s tighter. Glad to have you back.
Thanks a mil for your wonderful suggestions. Will do; glad to be back among you guys. 🙂
Glad you’re back, too. And we’re almost to the next prompt. 🙂
very nice but OUCH! need a bandaid? 🙂
Ha ha. Thank you Len.
OUCH!
🙂
That sign in the photo should say, “Watch your step!”
I agree. 🙂
Yikes! great work, my friend!
Thanks a mil. Love your support, always
:)!!!
Yes, i can feel the cold, hard boulders on your face. A very good take on the challenge.
Thank you, Gilly.
Ouch! I hope you didnt hurt yourself too badly..
Not at all. 🙂
Wow, that was shocking… At first, I was reading it perfectly pleasantly, and then suddenly… wow.
Although, I thought “of the face” after saying the character could only feel numbness felt a bit of excessive, having mentioned that in the previous sentence.
But besides that, engaging as always.
Thank you so much, Littlewonder2.
That’s a real opener… a great hook. Nicely done.
Thank you Sandra. You prompt was very inspirational. 🙂
Welcome back, Celestine. I missed you. A rather painful take on the prompt. Ouch!
Thank you, Rochelle. Missed your wonderful creativity. Glad to be back. 🙂
Welcome back and thanks for sharing a painful take on the prompt with us. Sounds like the beginning of a larger story.
http://adrarasdreams.blogspot.co.uk/2012/09/fridayfictioneers-gate.html
Thank you, Tollykit. I’m glad to be back with you guys. 🙂
Nothing says “compelling flash fiction” quite like a fairly, traumastic head wound. Very visceral piece and very nice job of making us feel the pain.
Thank you, Jeffrey.
Excellent take on the photo prompt! I could feel your character’s pain as she went tumbling down.
–Jan
Thank you, Jan.
Oooh, a painful dream that turns out to be real! A very nice turnabout of plot (although not very nice for the protagonist of the story). Lovely!
Thanks for the comment, Jan.
what a painful experience but happens too many times in real life!
Yes, Sharmsihtha. Stranger thigns happen in real life. Thank you, as always. 🙂
Ouuuch! Painful dream, at least I hope it was a dream!
A horrible nightmare come true, Emma. Thank you
Sleep walking perhaps? It’s nice to have you back.
Thank you, Russel. No, this is not sleepwalking. More like a nightmare come true. 🙂
A waking nightmare–we’ve all had them. You’ve really captured that moment where we hope it’s all a dream but wake to a terrible reality. Excellent job.
Here’s mine: http://unexpectedpaths.com/friday-fictioneers/dukkha/
Thank you, Maggie.
We must tread carefully in our dreams or awaken to find that … well, that they aren’t dreams at all. Good job.
Many thanks. 🙂
Whoa. Talk about a dangerous trip through the woods. Nice. 🙂
Thank you, CC
” I didn’t know where I was going but it was imperative that I got there.” We’ve all had capricious plans go awry.
You are right.. Thanks a mil for commenting.
Ah, nice! A lot of dreams are a lot like that, except of course for the waking-up-to-find-out-you’ve-actually-split-your-face thing. I’m intrigued by that part though, so it worked for me. Good job!
Thankyou, Brian. It does happen, I mean dreaming and waking up to see physical signs that it was no dream or that the dream was real. 🙂
Ha, you speak the truth
Very effective piece, hurtling face down and the gushing blood. Great job.
Thank you. 🙂
someone is not having a good day!
Yeah. 🙂
I hope I never get a dream like that one – especially the ‘turning out to be real’ part!
My sentiments exactly.
Ouch. I hope she survived the non-dream. Gushing blood is never a good thing. Mine at http://shirleymccann.blogspot.com/2012/09/friday-fictioneers-captured.html
I agree. Thank you for coming by. 🙂
That sounded too real for a dream, too. I would not want a fall like that and will watch my steps carefully.
Stranger things happen, Joyce. 🙂
Oh, thanks for visiting mine, and glad to have you back in the writing game with fellow FFs.
Missed you guys, iof the truth be told, Joyce and I do ho;pe I stay for a while. 🙂
So sorry for my late visit , I am not getting your updates on reader, I think.,…Will you accept my sorry ?
Of course, Aman. I accept your apology thought there is really no reason for that. I was getting worried about you because I know that you are very consistent with your commenting. 🙂 Glad to know that all is well.
You are really The Friend 😀
Sleepwalking again, my dear?
Don’t.
Here’s wishing you better dreams.
Aloha,
Doug
Thank you, Doug. And not sleepwalking, but a nightmare come true. 🙂
You are very good at the short short. 🙂